Bridget
Barmaid
Member since 2006-Sep-9
Posts: 887
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Bait and Switch
Our hero awakes from odd dreams, to discover he has a new ability.
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gaianwizard
Inebriated
Member since 2009-Sep-22
Posts: 11
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Loved it!!! The storyline is extremely enjoyable, with enough erotica to make it interesting. Plus recognizing all the "geek" references (i.e. the Dalek alarm and the Jon Snow reference) was a major bonus! It's not often that an erotica informs you about a TV adaptation to a favorite series of books. I just spent the last 2 hours reading it non-stop. I hope the rest isn't long in coming. Keep up the good work!
(posted from the Item Information Page)
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Comora
Inebriated
Member since 2010-Oct-21
Posts: 21
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Damn. That was heavy.
(posted from Chapter 11)
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Lucky869
Inebriated
Member since 2006-Dec-18
Posts: 30
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good read so far, really enjoying it. looking forward to more : )
(posted from Chapter 3)
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WarLord
Contributor
Member since 2006-Nov-18
Posts: 163
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Greetings
I'm enjoying this story very much. Fun ride with many interesting characters and situations to keep my interest.
Thanx for sharing your vision
(posted from Chapter 13)
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"A scrupulous writer, in every sentence that he writes, will ask himself at least four questions, thus: 1. What am I trying to say? 2. What words will express it? 3. What image or idiom will make it clearer? 4. Is this image fresh enough to have an effect?" - George Orwell, Politics and the English Language, 1946
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Colorado
Inebriated
Member since 2007-Sep-11
Posts: 25
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You have now made me sit on the edge of my seat for another series while waiting for the updates to be posted. Congratulations, I am hoping everything goes great so that you keep writing; I know, how selfish of me; and I look forward to any other work you write.
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Lucky869
Inebriated
Member since 2006-Dec-18
Posts: 30
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man, i'm lovin this story more and more, great writing.
(posted from Chapter 12)
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SuperArc
Tipsy
Member since 2009-Feb-10
Posts: 2
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First of all it's the Wheel of Time series, not the Dragon Reborn series. 
And secondly, the quote is: "Death is lighter than a feather, duty heavier than a mountain."
Your "duty is lighter than a feather, and yet heavier than a mountain." wouldnt make much sense.
(posted from Chapter 20)
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hoevenator
Tipsy
Member since 2010-Oct-4
Posts: 2
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I really liked the story, it kept me wanting more.
(posted from Final)
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Colorado
Inebriated
Member since 2007-Sep-11
Posts: 25
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I hope it isn't your last work ever...
You have a skill and you should never let your skill fade.
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sc8or8pi8on
Inebriated
Member since 2008-Jul-17
Posts: 10
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Ive read your threads from XNXX.... i think my name is the same there too, but just keep what i said in mind and i look forward to when you return to this form of writing.
GOOD LUCK OUT THERE
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Just moving through life as best as i can.
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Lucky869
Inebriated
Member since 2006-Dec-18
Posts: 30
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i enjoyed this book immensely and look forward to any more books you choose to grace us with : )
(posted from Final)
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grandad_rufus
Inebriated
Member since 2011-May-24
Posts: 30
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Nice story, nicely balanced plot. Well done!
(posted from the Item Information Page)
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If they give you ruled paper, write the other way.
Grandad Rufus.
It's not that I have a dirty mind, you understand. It's just that so many of my thoughts leave muddy little footprints...
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Kitsune
Inebriated
Member since 2012-May-7
Posts: 45
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Great story. I actually read all your stories over on xnxx and all of them where amazing. This was a great idea for a story loved every second of it.
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Lacy69
Inebriated
Member since 2016-Jun-21
Posts: 38
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Nicely written story with a well balanced plot. Would like to see more from you
(posted from the Item Information Page)
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Fenixreign
Completely Blotto
Member since 2014-Aug-2
Posts: 255
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Hopefully Eric will be able to get around to posting it for him soon. Unfortunately, we lost DB a while back. His stories are around if you look for them, but they just haven't been uploaded here yet.
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Zmaybe
Inebriated
Member since 2021-Jun-27
Posts: 85
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did the spin off ever come out, and if so where would I find it?
(posted from Final)
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Dadrepus
Wasted
Member since 2023-Jan-12
Posts: 141
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While I did enjoy the story and it did have a satisfying conclusion, I was disappointed in the amount of grammatical and spelling errors. And you had editors? One egregious error is not knowing when to use I and me. It is actually simple: Before the verb use I as in: "you and I are going out." After the verb use me: "John was angry with Mary and me." If you are unsure, just remove the other person and read it again. Are you angry with I or are you angry with me. I would normally send this kind of comment as a private email but it doesn't seem to be working correctly and reaching the authors as intended. Peace and love to all.
So, I just read the other forum posts and I assume DB has passed away? If so I am saddened to know he is gone if this is true. And...I guess he can disregard my comments above.
(posted from Final)
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Always willing to help. May not be good at it ;-)
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Eric Storm
Pub Owner
Member since 2006-Sep-13
Posts: 5971
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Yes, Dark Brother died several years ago.
Eric Storm
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