Triplet Troubles

A story about a single father who cheated on his wife ten years ago and the vengeance his three young daughters took on him for his crimes against them and their mother.

good storie. i think i woulda tied em all down to a bed and made em wait till they starved or told me were the pics were. hes going to go to jail anyway might as well get a lil revenge before you go.

(posted from Chapter 4)

I agree w/ advancewar good story. not your best but good enough
for me to read it all

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CFFCFFC:

Just a followup question to your comment, and to help out the author...

What would have made the story better, in your eyes?  "Not your best" by itself doesn't tell the author where he needs to improve...

Eric

honestly i think if you made him get a little bit more revenge i think it woulda been alot better. i do relize that hes supposed to ahve refrained becus of his personality but you asked for what we want not what the charecter would do lol.

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I think when you had him depressed after the death was true to showing how he really felt about his daughters and explains why he did what he did in my opinion.

That part made me go..well sad that she would do that over a stupid unfeeling uncaring parent she had. Shame her sisters and father did not notice before hand to prevent her. It would have added like maybe a chapter to two.

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dam just looked at my last post and my spelling is worse then usual.

Summer Roadtrip, Triplet Troubles, Adam Knight and a few other stories I've written, have been removed, at my request, from this site and others. If or when they will be re-posted, has not been determined. My apologies to those interested in reading them.

Good but spoilt by the sudden ending

(posted from Chapter 4)