[megamaster87] The song

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2009-Jan-20 @ 2:36 PM
Bridget
God
Member since 2006-Sep-9
Posts: 556

[megamaster87] song, The

My first Published Poem


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2009-Jan-24 @ 3:03 AM
Timotheos
Inebriated
Member since 2008-Dec-22
Posts: 15

I found this for the most part good. You slipped out of prose for the last two verses though, that is the only big thing to jump out at me.

As a whole though, I found it to be fairly good, keep up the work.

~Tim

(posted from Chapter 1)


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2009-Jan-25 @ 10:02 AM
megamaster87
Tipsy
Member since 2008-Jan-30
Posts: 6

I actually wrote it while standing around at work...I am starting a new Job soon, which will keep me away from home often, and have been trying to decide whether or not to ask out a girl I have had feelings for since we worked together...

(posted from the Item Information Page)


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