| 2009-Mar-28 @ 2:36 PM | |
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Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
A Fair Price ----- Please read The Mystic Wolf Pub Critiquing Guide. SITE CONTENT POLICY: The administrator of this site will not reject, remove, or censor any story posted to this site based on the story's content. No story shall be removed except for purely technical reasons (which will be worked out with the author so that the story can be reposted as quickly as possible), or due to a direct order from the site's hosting provider, a law-enforcement entity, or the story's owner. |
| 2009-Mar-29 @ 5:51 AM | |
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nightsecho Wasted Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 168 |
not bad i like it ----- looking at you with wide eyes from the darkness |
| 2009-Mar-29 @ 10:49 AM | |
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Black Rose Evil Bar Wench Member since 2006-Nov-27 Posts: 164 |
This sounds very interesting. I hope you continue it too, I'm interested to see what happens next. It's almost got a TKL kind of feel about it, and that's a good thing. ----- Black Rose "Being a writer is a very peculiar sort of a job: it's always you versus a blank sheet of paper (or a blank screen) and quite often the blank piece of paper wins." – Neil Gaiman |
| 2009-Mar-29 @ 10:45 PM | |
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Corvis Contributor Member since 2006-Nov-28 Posts: 87 |
Thank you, Nightsecho. ----- |
| 2009-Mar-30 @ 6:17 AM | |
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Black Rose Evil Bar Wench Member since 2006-Nov-27 Posts: 164 |
I'm impressed you managed to get this second chapter out so quick! I suspect you've been holding out on us for a while, you sneaky person you. I'm glad Simon was able to escape his predicament. Oh, and one tiny quibble... I think the name of the group is the Bee Gees (two words and not with a j). And if you wanted to be *really* pedantic, the name of the song is "Stayin' Alive" (Because songs are frequently grammatically incorrect to make us all nuts). :-)
----- Black Rose "Being a writer is a very peculiar sort of a job: it's always you versus a blank sheet of paper (or a blank screen) and quite often the blank piece of paper wins." – Neil Gaiman |
| 2009-Mar-30 @ 11:13 AM | |
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nightsecho Wasted Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 168 |
great 2nd chapter ----- looking at you with wide eyes from the darkness |
| 2009-Mar-30 @ 10:46 PM | |
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RED_FOX87 Inebriated Member since 2006-Dec-7 Posts: 60 |
looks like a good story. Can't wait to see what happens with Simon at school and with the obligatory jock-fights-Simon-but-Simon-kicks-his-ass scene. Also can't wait to see what other powers he has/will get. ----- Sex is good, Sex is fine, Doggystyle Or 69, For having fun Or getting paid, Everyone likes Getting laid. |
| 2009-Apr-2 @ 9:17 AM | |
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nightsecho Wasted Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 168 |
another great chapter ----- looking at you with wide eyes from the darkness |
| 2009-Apr-11 @ 7:19 AM | |
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SteelRage Inebriated Member since 2006-Dec-8 Posts: 18 |
I like it so far. I hope to see more. ----- SteelRage ....wow, this is the best I can come up with |
| 2009-Apr-26 @ 7:39 PM | |
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Alq Inebriated Member since 2007-Nov-10 Posts: 19 |
this is going great so far ----- |
| 2011-May-18 @ 12:28 PM | |
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SilentSadist Contributor Member since 2008-Dec-18 Posts: 162 |
YAY!!!! more please. Very well written and easy to empathize characters make this an instant favorite for me ----- Who is General Failure, and why is he reading my hard disk? All Your Base Are Belong To Us |
| 2011-Nov-15 @ 8:18 AM | |
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Comora Inebriated Member since 2010-Oct-21 Posts: 21 |
This story is filled to the brim with potential. I eagerly await the next chapter. Adults are stupid. ----- |
| 2012-Feb-29 @ 10:51 AM | |
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SHALIK_TEX Tipsy Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 9 |
Nice story so far..can't wait to read more.. ----- |
