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2009-Aug-20 @ 9:56 AM | |
Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
Seeds of Dissension ----- Please read The Mystic Wolf Pub Critiquing Guide. SITE CONTENT POLICY: The administrator of this site will not reject, remove, or censor any story posted to this site based on the story's content. No story shall be removed except for purely technical reasons (which will be worked out with the author so that the story can be reposted as quickly as possible), or due to a direct order from the site's hosting provider, a law-enforcement entity, or the story's owner. |
2009-Aug-21 @ 12:56 AM | |
gadget Inebriated Member since 2007-Jul-19 Posts: 22 |
Nice as a short story but it leaves itself open, I think to a good book. ----- |
2009-Aug-21 @ 4:45 AM | |
big_black_nemesis Tipsy Member since 2009-Aug-18 Posts: 5 |
Great read. Definitely leaves itself open to expansion. For some reason my mind's eye created Nick as a young Harrison Ford from a galaxy far far away. ----- |
2009-Aug-21 @ 5:42 AM | |
Storymaster69 Contributor Member since 2006-Nov-7 Posts: 329 |
Thanks guys. ----- Sex isn't the answer. Sex is the question. Yes is the answer. |
2009-Aug-21 @ 6:00 AM | |
big_black_nemesis Tipsy Member since 2009-Aug-18 Posts: 5 |
Oh he was distinct enough. Even with the briefness of the story there was enough there to give him some dimension. In retrospect, for a really short story its probably useful leaning on a cliche - that much less space consumed by character development. I'm sure that if you decide to expand the story we'll see many more dimensions to his character. Just as long as he never utters the words "I hate snakes!" at which point I'll be collecting the shattered pieces of my mind from off the floor. ----- |
2009-Aug-21 @ 8:26 AM | |
Jefferson Contributor Member since 2006-Dec-3 Posts: 449 |
Very enjoyable SM. But still, a Queen named Candice? Please! Couldn't you have come up with something slightly more believable. You should make a series of it. Nick the delivery guy. ----- |
2009-Aug-21 @ 10:05 AM | |
Brent Tipsy Member since 2009-Aug-10 Posts: 4 |
I would love to read more from this universe. I do hope you write some more in this setting. ----- |
2009-Oct-29 @ 4:14 PM | |
advancewar Wasted Member since 2007-Feb-6 Posts: 204 |
lol sucks to be this guy and i agree with jefferson a series of this would be cool ----- life=books |
2009-Oct-31 @ 8:21 AM | |
Storymaster69 Contributor Member since 2006-Nov-7 Posts: 329 |
Thanks ----- Sex isn't the answer. Sex is the question. Yes is the answer. |