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[Brent] Potions

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2009-Oct-14 @ 9:05 AM
Bridget
Barmaid
Member since 2006-Sep-9
Posts: 778

[Brent] Potions

Short stories about a man named Smith and the people he sells mind control potions to.


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2010-Jun-28 @ 4:31 AM
James Marcus
Contributor
Member since 2010-Jun-15
Posts: 120

Interesting Concept. The dialog was good and the interactions were nice. The only sugestion I can give would be to include more descrition on what is going on around the characters.

(posted from Second Chance)


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2010-Jul-5 @ 12:42 PM
Eternaldreams
Tipsy
Member since 2009-Feb-28
Posts: 3

This set isn't bad.  I see some progression in plot twists through the chapters as well as some growth and an ability to change the story as needed.  Nice work.

(posted from Sexual Harrasment 2)


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--Leo Tolstoy, War and Peace
2010-Jul-6 @ 4:27 AM
Eric Storm
Pub Owner
Member since 2006-Sep-13
Posts: 5751

Eternaldreams:

I appreciate that you are giving feedback to our prospective authors.  Were you one of the two (yes, only TWO) people who also used the recommendation system for this story?

I'd like to remind everyone that the recommendation system is the "voting mechanism" used to determine whether we ask this author to stay permanently or not...

Eric Storm


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