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2009-Nov-10 @ 3:01 AM | |
Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
[Saetan] Justice ----- Please read The Mystic Wolf Pub Critiquing Guide. SITE CONTENT POLICY: The administrator of this site will not reject, remove, or censor any story posted to this site based on the story's content. No story shall be removed except for purely technical reasons (which will be worked out with the author so that the story can be reposted as quickly as possible), or due to a direct order from the site's hosting provider, a law-enforcement entity, or the story's owner. |
2009-Nov-14 @ 6:41 AM | |
SlaveMaster Wasted Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 107 |
This story was ok for a short story however more content on the story would have been better as well as some hints towards what kinda person this Justice guy was. In the story the crown stated ""I object" called out the D.A., shivering involuntarily as Justice turned to look at her. "How do we know that this whole thing wasn't taped after-the fact, since there's no real proof that this 'video' was taken on that date?"" with the response of the defense "You'll have proof that this is how events happened, if you'll keep watching" I did not see where this problem was solved. Also I found that the court proceedings were iffy if you were trying to have the tribunal accurate with the obvious exception of the events caused by Justice. Overall I did rather enjoy the read it was well organized and is a hundred fold better then anything that I could accomplish for a fictional story. ----- Welcome to The Mystic Wolf Pub |
2009-Nov-14 @ 7:28 AM | |
Storymaster69 Contributor Member since 2006-Nov-7 Posts: 329 |
I think his attempt at solving this was the video showing the father doing what he did. If that video was possible then by default the rest of the video was possible too. ----- Sex isn't the answer. Sex is the question. Yes is the answer. |
2009-Nov-16 @ 7:22 AM | |
SlaveMaster Wasted Member since 2006-Dec-5 Posts: 107 |
yes but there was still a discrepancy on the continuity of the video. ----- Welcome to The Mystic Wolf Pub |