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2011-Jan-12 @ 12:01 AM | |
Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 778 |
[onefromb5b4] Coming of Age ----- Please read The Mystic Wolf Pub Critiquing Guide. SITE CONTENT POLICY: The administrator of this site will not reject, remove, or censor any story posted to this site based on the story's content. No story shall be removed except for purely technical reasons (which will be worked out with the author so that the story can be reposted as quickly as possible), or due to a direct order from the site's hosting provider, a law-enforcement entity, or the story's owner. |
2011-Jan-12 @ 4:54 AM | |
Bd.Carlo Inebriated Member since 2009-Nov-7 Posts: 62 |
Well, that was interesting. It was a well written story, and easy to follow. ----- "Genius may have its limitations, but stupidity is not thus handicapped." Elbert Hubbard "A bookstore is one of the only pieces of evidence we have that people are still thinking." Jerry Seinfeld |
2011-Jan-12 @ 8:11 AM | |
Cenobite829 Inebriated Member since 2010-Nov-13 Posts: 28 |
It isn't a bad story but I had a problem with the fact that there was no real dialogue it was all stuff like " She asked me this so I said this." A little more characterizations and actual conversations would be make it alot better. ----- Jigsaw: If you're good at anticipating the human mind. It leaves nothing to chance |
2011-Jan-12 @ 10:38 AM | |
T. Weller Contributor Member since 2009-Aug-19 Posts: 22 |
This was my first venture into writing erotica. All critiques are welcome and helpful. Thanks for the 2 that were posted already. ----- |
2011-Jun-17 @ 8:23 PM | |
T. Weller Contributor Member since 2009-Aug-19 Posts: 22 |
I rewrote this story. Please see the Revised one. ----- |
2011-Jun-18 @ 12:44 AM | |
Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5751 |
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