| 2012-Aug-16 @ 6:39 AM | |
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Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 778 |
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| 2012-Aug-16 @ 10:25 PM | |
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HJP1993 Inebriated Member since 2008-Jan-6 Posts: 21 |
Very well done! This is the first story I have added to my favorites that is not X rated ----- |
| 2012-Aug-29 @ 5:04 AM | |
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Doc Spratley Inebriated Member since 2007-May-1 Posts: 21 |
I just started the story and can see that this will be an interesting and shows great promise. I do have one concern regarding the spelling and grammar errors. Please try and correct your mistakes as it does take away from the flow of the story. ----- |
| 2012-Aug-29 @ 7:32 AM | |
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Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5751 |
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| 2012-Sep-4 @ 9:46 AM | |
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Doc Spratley Inebriated Member since 2007-May-1 Posts: 21 |
Eric:
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| 2017-Jul-7 @ 4:50 AM | |
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coalbuckety Inebriated Member since 2010-Dec-21 Posts: 11 |
A great start to a story, I look forward to the continuing episodes. ----- |
To be more constructive than supportive however, I will say there are a few places that could be fixed, " as i Told you" should probably be " as *I* told you" and things like that which an editor may be able to catch for you. Of course, it is seemingly impossible to catch all those mistakes even if you have a team of editors