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A tutor's payment

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2012-Oct-18 @ 3:33 AM
Bridget
Barmaid
Member since 2006-Sep-9
Posts: 779

A tutor's payment

A teenager tutors more then girls


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2012-Oct-19 @ 8:24 PM
James Marcus
Contributor
Member since 2010-Jun-15
Posts: 120

Very good start. However everything came off a little rushed, I would a a bit more description of the people and their actions, their surroundings or what is going on around them, maybe some background stuff to give everyone a better feel of the characters and who they are. But definitely a good start.

(posted from Chapter 1)


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2012-Oct-21 @ 2:42 AM
Crusader
Wasted
Member since 2007-Jul-19
Posts: 155

James M, i wouldn't hold your breath.
Kahmnd has been posting for years at stories.xnxx and all of his characters seem to have very little trouble falling into money and getting almost everything that they are striving for without much trouble, at least that is how they read to me.

don't get me wrong, the stories he has been posting are good for a quick jerk (and I've been using them as such for years), but if your looking for an in-depth story, where the plot nails you and almost forces to you come back for more..... nuff said.

all of that being said, he is still 10 times a better writer then I am.

-Crusader


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