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Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
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SilentSadist Contributor Member since 2008-Dec-18 Posts: 162 |
I liked it. You chased your imagination and while there are things I easily bored of (major archetype cliches), you took the time to explore many variations and created enough diversity & stimulus to balance the story. Reread this work several times in the future and hone your ability to craft literary works, because once you have I'd definitely be down for reading a revised/improved version of this story line. ----- Who is General Failure, and why is he reading my hard disk? All Your Base Are Belong To Us |