| 2017-Nov-8 @ 6:59 AM | |
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Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
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| 2017-Nov-10 @ 1:16 AM | |
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SkiesEnd Inebriated Member since 2015-Oct-14 Posts: 17 |
I love the idea for the story but trying to read with the bullet point conversation style I find jarring and keeps taking me out of the story.
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| 2017-Nov-10 @ 2:58 PM | |
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Marked One Contributor Member since 2017-Nov-7 Posts: 3 |
Thank you for the feedback. I was already aware of that. It does bother me too, so I will change the style to a different one from chapter 3 and on. ----- |
| 2017-Dec-8 @ 4:16 AM | |
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earthskeeper Tipsy Member since 2017-Dec-8 Posts: 5 |
I sure hope the story is finished or at least added to. Thanks ----- |