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Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 779 |
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| 2021-Sep-11 @ 9:09 AM | |
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Pleidius Contributor Member since 2021-Jun-10 Posts: 55 |
Something I wrote a few years ago. ----- If you're prepared to face the consequences, go ahead . . . |
| 2021-Sep-13 @ 1:43 AM | |
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sermona Inebriated Member since 2019-Feb-18 Posts: 34 |
l like the mysterious faction. Makes a great suspense. Can't wait to read more. ----- |
| 2021-Sep-24 @ 4:15 PM | |
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sermona Inebriated Member since 2019-Feb-18 Posts: 34 |
For me this chapter was a bit of anticlimax. the solution for the military seems rather rashly.
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| 2021-Oct-16 @ 4:05 AM | |
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StormShaddow Tipsy Member since 2020-Apr-19 Posts: 5 |
this is a great story I can't wait for more. ----- |
| 2022-Feb-16 @ 2:26 AM | |
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Zmaybe Inebriated Member since 2021-Jun-27 Posts: 64 |
Thank you for the fun story. The recent chapters made me think and not all authors can do that, I am kind of dense sometimes. Thanks again for sharing your imagination. ----- |
| 2022-Feb-18 @ 12:31 AM | |
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Pleidius Contributor Member since 2021-Jun-10 Posts: 55 |
Chapters eighteen through twenty started out as one chapter then grew like some literary crabgrass as I was proofreading . . . ----- If you're prepared to face the consequences, go ahead . . . |
| 2022-Feb-18 @ 2:25 AM | |
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Lacyann Inebriated Member since 2020-Mar-31 Posts: 18 |
Very interesting 3 chapter, am wondering if John's little problem is due to the connection to his sister in some weird way. Also it could be just the stress of the whole situation of the trauma of being kidnapped and having that noise in her head for two weeks ----- |
| 2022-Feb-18 @ 8:42 PM | |
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pepsiguy1 Contributor Member since 2012-Sep-5 Posts: 57 |
Just finished the last 4 chapters. I don't know why I didn't see it coming.Reminds me of an old Twilight episode, maybe two of them. Aliens give powers to a mere mortal and watches to see what happens. Please continue ----- |
| 2022-Mar-4 @ 2:47 AM | |
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swgman Tipsy Member since 2022-Feb-26 Posts: 1 |
I read every word of your story with great interest. Your writing is very good and holds the reader's interest well. I wondered how you'd end it. The last sentence says it all. There;s no reason to expand on anything beyond that. Great job!!! ----- |
| 2022-Mar-4 @ 3:21 AM | |
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Pleidius Contributor Member since 2021-Jun-10 Posts: 55 |
I have been struggling with the next chapter for a while now, intending to end it in a two or three chapters. I think you might have spotted my problem. I was trying to add to a finished story. Thank you for your comment. ----- If you're prepared to face the consequences, go ahead . . . |
| 2022-Mar-4 @ 5:10 PM | |
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sermona Inebriated Member since 2019-Feb-18 Posts: 34 |
stopping there would be a good open end. ----- |
| 2023-Apr-11 @ 10:10 PM | |
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dbmretired Tipsy Member since 2021-Oct-13 Posts: 2 |
beginning was interesting
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| 2023-Apr-12 @ 11:11 PM | |
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