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#1 2022-02-09 14:52:25

Bridget
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Saving Sister Sue

Saving Sister Sue

A Navy Seal has to save his little sister and what follows.


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#2 2022-02-10 17:48:39

Soulless0311
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Great first chapter!

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#3 2022-02-11 21:58:32

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Thank you for the encouragement.  I am working on chapter 2 now.

Snake_eater1960

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#4 2022-02-14 04:38:51

StormShaddow
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Great first chapter looking forward to more chapters.

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#5 2022-02-14 16:34:08

Zmaybe
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Registered: 2021-06-27
Posts: 51

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Oh my goodness.  I do hope you continue and not leave me hanging like so many good authors on here.  From the first few paragraphs I was hooked and read the whole thing in one sitting, didn't even see distracting spelling nor grammatical issues.  Please, oh please continue the story and keep your imagination flowing. Thank you for sharing your talet with us.

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#6 2022-02-14 17:10:04

Zmaybe
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Thank you again.  Your view of social media is spot on.  My wife is constantly on as are my Children and step schildren.  I gave in about a year and a half ago and went on Face book,  jeesh like high school in there.  I lasted about 3 months and closed the account and have not regretted leaving.  Anyhow, please keep writing and posting.

(posted from Chapter 2)

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#7 2022-02-15 01:32:08

Glockman22
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Great story looking forward to more chapters
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#8 2022-02-15 19:14:33

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Zmaybe wrote:

I do hope you continue and not leave me hanging like so many good authors on here. 

(posted from Chapter 1)

Rest assured I will finish this story at some point.  Exactly when I can't tell as there are still ideas running around in my twisted brain.  I too hate when good authors leave us hanging in the middle with no ending. 

Thank you for the encouragement and I hope you continue to enjoy this story.

Snake_eater

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#9 2022-02-15 20:44:23

Zmaybe
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Interesting story, am looking forward to where we go from here.  As for long or short chapters.  If you keep writing with the passion you put into chapter 1, length is not an issue, it read fast and I kept going in one sitting.

(posted from Chapter 2)

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#10 2022-02-18 03:45:28

Josh.Bond
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

So far so good. An Interesting read so far.

(posted from Chapter 3)

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#11 2022-02-19 07:43:05

Glockman22
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Another great chapter looking forward to the next one.

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#12 2022-02-20 19:40:45

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Chapter 4 is now up I hope you enjoy reading it as much as I did writing it.

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#13 2022-02-22 10:10:58

Glockman22
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

I am looking forward to more this story is getting better with every chapter.

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#14 2022-02-22 16:36:47

Lacyann
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

enjoying your story so far and looking forward to new chapters.  Also looking forward if you have planned on who was the backer in the states for the kidnapping of Suzie and her friend

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#15 2022-03-03 02:31:56

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Lacyann wrote:

enjoying your story so far and looking forward to new chapters.  Also looking forward if you have planned on who was the backer in the states for the kidnapping of Suzie and her friend

Chapter 7 will be for you Lacyann ;-)

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#16 2022-03-04 17:37:48

Lacyann
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

nice.  I always like the stories of black ops situations.  And the corruption with in the government and people deal with that situation.  With Dan having powerful people on his side it is going to be interesting.

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#17 2022-03-07 04:35:14

Glockman22
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Another great chapter.

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#18 2022-03-07 20:13:25

Lacyann
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

very nice chapter was not expecting the CEO was looking to someone in the government.  Feel bad for Beth it would seem that she was going to be the escape goat for Dan's Death.  For nice indead

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#19 2022-03-07 20:25:30

Eric Storm
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Lacyann wrote:

...she was going to be the escape goat...

Sorry, I can't not.  I tried not-ing, and nearly hurt myself.

Yes, we all know what you meant, but just for future reference, the term is scapegoat.  (Though its etymology does stem from a word that means "escape"...)

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#20 2022-03-13 00:39:46

Zmaybe
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

A new direction added to the future with the island.  Do they all move or just vacation there?  Hmm... the possibilities.  Too bad it is so far away, an island off the US mainland coast would of been more convienent, but I ain't the writer...lol.  And your a very good writer, so I will wait for the mysterious plot to unfold.

(posted from Chapter 9)

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#21 2022-03-14 15:38:58

sermona
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

oh my when will jeff realize that living on this island won't reduce his workload significantly.

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#22 2022-03-14 15:47:31

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

When I started this story I was thinking it might be 2 or maybe 3 chapters and here I am trying to edit chapter 10.  I'm happy that people seem to be enjoying it and it seems to have taken on a life of it's own.  I still have no idea how I will end this all nor when it will end.  In the meantime I hope you all continue to enjoy my imagination.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#23 2022-03-24 04:36:54

Zmaybe
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Your endings always leave me with a smile.

(posted from Chapter 12)

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#24 2022-03-24 15:25:31

sermona
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

I read the comment of Zmaybe before reading the Chapter.
My first thought: O no! Snake_Eater finshed the Story.

After reading the Chapter: Thanks, Zmaybe you got me there. You only meant the chapter ending.

There are so many open questions and scenes i like to read:
What happens with his navy career? will the Chinies try again? Holiday on the Island and the reaction of all guests. The meeting with the lawyer. The wedding and honymoon. Maybe a bachelor party. Will they change or branch the farm to the island? Will the enterprise expand, maybe private black ops mercenaries? Had Banks some blackmail material on crooked Senators who want to cut the loose ends?

so many possibilitys for this story. I hope to read much more of your imagination.

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#25 2022-03-28 13:52:48

chevyzr2
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Finished all the chapters and I must say this is a great story. Not just full of sex either. It has good drama and action in it as well. I’m excited to find out what’s gonna happen next.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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