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#1 2022-04-30 03:29:21
Something Extra
Something Extra
Jason has something other kids don't. He doesn't understand what it is or how it works, but he's beginning to learn
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#2 2022-05-01 15:43:17
- Josh.Bond
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Re: Something Extra
So far So good I like the premise and the flow. I also like that you are not describing the women like an AI body scanner, "5'6" 125 pounds 34D breasts". It feels more normal for a person.
(posted from Chapter One)
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#3 2022-05-01 17:44:09
- Pleidius
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Re: Something Extra
Thank you for your remarks
I hope you like the story as it develops
If you're prepared to face the consequences, go ahead . . .
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#4 2022-05-01 19:49:04
- Eric Storm
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Re: Something Extra
Hey! I paid good money for that AI body scanner for my stories! 
LOL
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#5 2022-05-01 23:59:23
- Pleidius
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Re: Something Extra
Eric Storm wrote:
Hey! I paid good money for that AI body scanner for my stories!
Eric Storm
I always preferred a hands on approach . . .
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#6 2022-05-02 02:48:33
- Eric Storm
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Re: Something Extra
You probably had more opportunities to apply the hands-on approach.
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#7 2022-06-02 10:04:48
- Pleidius
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Re: Something Extra
I screwed up and posted a chapter from another story here.
Fixed now . . .
The real chapter four has been posted.
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