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Bridget · 2023-08-04 10:55:52

The Call

This is, at its heart, a story about empowering children. It develops over time, but the strength of the kids is the heart of the story.

Yes, there is lots of sex, but it tapers over time to be a lot more story and a lot less sex. Oh, there is still sex, but it doesn't dominate.

I learned as I wrote and I think my writing improved.

Give it a shot. Lots more chapters to quickly come.

Zmaybe · 2023-08-04 12:45:53

Oh my goodness. Love thus story. Been reading is for a while on Nifty. If you have not run across it before, start here at the beginning, it is fun and full of startling characters and plots. A must read for all lovers of sex with lots of twists and turns.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

timbuch · 2023-08-04 13:19:11

Thank you! I am having so much fun writing it. This is letting me get a broader audience (and clean up my grammar).

Dadrepus · 2023-08-25 15:49:59

Bravo! Well conceived story. Some very small grammatical errors but much better read than most of these types of stories. I hope it continues as I have enjoyed it immensely. And the list of "cast of characters" after each chapter was brilliant. I started to do this on a white board on many of the hard cover books I read as I forget, on long stories, who some people are, relative to the main cast. While this may have started as an incest story, sorta, it has evolved into a real world fantasy of what life is like for the extremely rich. Interspersed with deprecating humor. I found it most entertaining. 24 chapters is long for one of these stories but in this case, not long enough. Please continue with the adventures of Bob and family.

(posted from Chapter 24 - Austin Already)

Dadrepus · 2023-08-25 18:24:12

Wow, what a surprise, I finish my feedback from chapter 24 and I see chapter 25 posted. Yay, Orlando get some recognition. Fun chapter and some big name dropping. Did you forget Taylor in your end credits? Keep it coming. Totally delightful.

(posted from Chapter 25 - Supermodels Part Deux)

timbuch · 2023-08-26 09:32:51

Feel free to point out any grammatical errors. My early writing wasn't perfect, so I am cleaning them up before posting here. I just don't always get it perfect!

I'll keep posting fairly quickly. I'm doing that final re-edit and it is time consuming!

Glad you're enjoying it. I think I'll post 26 for you (there are 202 chapters done).

Dadrepus wrote:
Bravo! Well conceived story. Some very small grammatical errors but much better read than most of these types of stories. I hope it continues as I have enjoyed it immensely. And the list of "cast of characters" after each chapter was brilliant. I started to do this on a white board on many of the hard cover books I read as I forget, on long stories, who some people are, relative to the main cast. While this may have started as an incest story, sorta, it has evolved into a real world fantasy of what life is like for the extremely rich. Interspersed with deprecating humor. I found it most entertaining. 24 chapters is long for one of these stories but in this case, not long enough. Please continue with the adventures of Bob and family.

(posted from Chapter 24 - Austin Already)

Harddreams · 2023-08-30 20:57:17

Good fun, but would have been nice to have a bit more backstory of the personalities of the characters at the beginning. Jumping straight into the sex killed a bit of the anticipation and excitement.
Could have been so much better with a bit more Build up.

(posted from Chapter 1 - The Kids Arrive)

Harddreams · 2023-08-31 00:41:13

in your stats list , cock sizes are incomplete ..lol

(posted from Chapter 2 - Life is Spectacular)

Dadrepus · 2023-08-31 00:55:59

Harddreams wrote:
Good fun, but would have been nice to have a bit more backstory of the personalities of the characters at the beginning. Jumping straight into the sex killed a bit of the anticipation and excitement.
Could have been so much better with a bit more Build up.

(posted from Chapter 1 - The Kids Arrive)

I agree somewhat. We do get some of the backstories of the 4 main kids, I would like more details of Bob's life growing up. Why was he estranged from his sister? Some small details of his growing up and the influences that made Bob the man he is.

202 chapters, oh my! Please post more. I think you will have established a record that will never be broken.

You say broader audience, where else have you posted? Just curious. I will still wait here for your additions as I have financially supported this site for a while. Not much but I know what websites cost (because I used to charge for designing and hosting them on my own servers). I'm retired now and sold my business. So, just having fun reading.

timbuch · 2023-08-31 17:32:52

Harddreams wrote:
Good fun, but would have been nice to have a bit more backstory of the personalities of the characters at the beginning. Jumping straight into the sex killed a bit of the anticipation and excitement.
Could have been so much better with a bit more Build up.

(posted from Chapter 1 - The Kids Arrive)

I completely agree with you and you'll see my writing style changed (and I hope improve) over time. As I mentioned, it becomes more about the characters and less about the sex.

This is the only story I have ever written. There are over 200 chapters. I'm doing a cleanup edit and will eventually post them all.

Thanks!

timbuch · 2023-08-31 17:34:17

Dadrepus wrote:
Harddreams wrote:
Good fun, but would have been nice to have a bit more backstory of the personalities of the characters at the beginning. Jumping straight into the sex killed a bit of the anticipation and excitement.
Could have been so much better with a bit more Build up.

(posted from Chapter 1 - The Kids Arrive)
I agree somewhat. We do get some of the backstories of the 4 main kids, I would like more details of Bob's life growing up. Why was he estranged from his sister? Some small details of his growing up and the influences that made Bob the man he is.

202 chapters, oh my! Please post more. I think you will have established a record that will never be broken.

You say broader audience, where else have you posted? Just curious. I will still wait here for your additions as I have financially supported this site for a while. Not much but I know what websites cost (because I used to charge for designing and hosting them on my own servers). I'm retired now and sold my business. So, just having fun reading.

I never developed his backstory beyond the big age difference with his sister. You'll see Bob grow, a lot. Chapter 40 changes the entire direction of the story (I think for the better).

timbuch · 2023-08-31 17:35:34

Harddreams wrote:
in your stats list , cock sizes are incomplete ..lol

(posted from Chapter 2 - Life is Spectacular)

They shouldn't be! Can you give me a specific example?

Dadrepus · 2023-09-04 01:40:08

I have been enjoying this unbelievable story but I am wondering about the timeline. Have you ever compiled a timeline to see if the story is structurally correct. How is it possible they have purchased 7 homes and no-one is aging to any degree. No birthdays? The girls have been 11 too long. There is no way this has gone on for only 1, let alone 2 or 3 years without people aging up. Not only should their ages increase during the stories but also in the list on the bottom of each chapter.

(posted from Chapter 31 - Leslie Turns Blue)

Eric Storm · 2023-09-04 20:37:07

Don't you ever watch the Simpsons? Fictional characters never age.

3dlol

Eric Storm

Dadrepus · 2023-09-05 19:46:01

Eric Storm wrote:
Don't you ever watch the Simpsons? Fictional characters never age.

Eric Storm

3dlol

Yes I have but we all know they are fictional. But in this story we want to believe they are not, we just haven't met them yet, in person. No, I'm not crazy ;-)

timbuch · 2023-09-05 20:59:54

There is a method to my madness. They do age. Honestly, I aged them too fast in the beginning, so I've spread "aging" out a lot so they all don't age out. They did just age again (in about 205). There are some before then. Right now, for example, Leslie is 17.

It has been challenging, so I actually automated it. Every character is in a spreadsheet. They all age at once at the beginning of the chapter. I wrote a program that "plugs in" the age. For example, <AGE:Leslie> would get replace with 17.

It didn't kick in until about this far in the story, but from here on it should be perfect. I think it already is.

Crazy huh.

Dadrepus · 2023-09-08 12:34:24

Well, I got to 45. Wow, 45 and there is more to come. My oh my, has the direction changed, for the better? We'll see. Is this good enough to me made into several hard cover books? Most definitely with just a little more clean-up. If this is your first book, it is a very impressive start. The fact that over 200 chapters have already been written, any hope on our part to significantly change or alter anything should just be pushed out of our head. We should just enjoy the ride. I have always believed our children are smarter and more mature than we allow them to be so I appreciate the direction.

timbuch · 2023-09-08 18:50:03

Oh I simply love suggestions and ideas but yes, patience is required. You'll want to finish (I hope). I publish a new chapter every two weeks. I'm done through mid-2025 3dsmile .

I'll get them all up here. From about 115 on, I had a great editor, so they're clean. I'm doing a "cleanup pass" through 114 and that's time-consuming.

I hope everyone is enjoying it. It does get a lot more fun.

Dadrepus · 2023-09-16 11:16:44

What I thought to myself self while reading Amy's escapades in this chapter is What happened to the twins? You know, Bob and Amy's kids. They are mentioned so little I feel they have been forgotten. When they went to the beach, where did the little ones go? While Amy was being the school nurse, where were the kids? At their age and the fact that Amy should be lactating....so mother's milk? I don't know how much you want to change besides spelling and grammar but some of these stories seem incomplete without mentioning any of the little ones.

Great turn of events though. If only the pease was true.

(posted from Chapter 59 - Gabe)

Dadrepus · 2023-09-17 02:31:39

Well, seems like I spoke too soon as the Prince Bill and Princess Jessica shows up in this chapter, oh boy.

(posted from Chapter 62 - Fund Raising Is Hard Work)

Dadrepus · 2023-09-17 15:09:26

Chapter 64, pretty entertaining chapter. However I take exception to the comment by Tim (via Amy) that the Lancia Stratos is an ugly car so ugly that it is cute?

Being a former Lancia Zagato owner I have a love for the Stratos but I'll let you be the judge.
https://www.lbspecialistcars.com/str/
This company builds a replica. I don't know too many other cars that have complete replicas being built.

(posted from Chapter 64 - Montreal Needs A School)

timbuch · 2023-09-22 14:53:42

Dadrepus wrote:
Well, seems like I spoke too soon as the Prince Bill and Princess Jessica shows up in this chapter, oh boy.

(posted from Chapter 62 - Fund Raising Is Hard Work)

Oh you're going to love Jessica and Bill. They become very important and fun

Dadrepus · 2023-09-24 03:49:21

So, you finally mentioned the Dig. Are we going to learn anything more about this mysterious site? I hope so. This has been a blast so far. While I do like the sexcapades, I like the world building more. Are you going to reveal the magic of the well water or will it remain a secret for most of the novel?

This is truly prolific writing with very few grammar errors or mis-types.

(posted from Chapter 82 - The Swarm)

timbuch · 2023-09-24 12:52:48

Dadrepus wrote:
So, you finally mentioned the Dig. Are we going to learn anything more about this mysterious site? I hope so. This has been a blast so far. While I do like the sexcapades, I like the world building more. Are you going to reveal the magic of the well water or will it remain a secret for most of the novel?

This is truly prolific writing with very few grammar errors or mis-types.

(posted from Chapter 82 - The Swarm)

I move away from the well water to what I think is a more believable explanation. You'll get there. I also like the world building more, which is why the sex becomes MUCH less of a focus over time. It's still an undercurrent mut much more implied.

I do work hard on the grammar. In fact I'm re-reading the entire story and doing another edit. It's time-consuming! Then again, it is fun reading it from the beginning. The story has been going on for five years. Just current events have changed so much since then. Who would have predicted Putin's invasion of Ukraine.

Glad you like it. It is a labor of love for me and I spend WAY too much time on it.

Dadrepus · 2023-09-28 18:57:00

Ok, this chapter confused me a bit. Crisis at the U.S. puts Chris as President and U.N. puts Orlando temporarily in charge of Russia. For how long? How is he then going to go on tour with Grace and the others and still manage Russia? Why no more details for the search for Kyrsten and crew. Seems like all these happenings could have been greatly expanded, before the tangent of musical tour and house buying from Bob and crew. JFC, the President is missing, why isn't Bob and crew coming up with ways to help search? You really could have expanded on this mystery. Sometimes snippets aren't enough.

(posted from Chapter 92 - President, Seriously?)

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