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#1 2009-03-13 06:15:14

Bridget
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Pfynnic Fox, The

The Pfynnic Fox

Where do I go to join this religion?

Entry for PubTales Challenge #1.


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#2 2009-03-16 17:53:37

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Hmmm.

112 views.
0 comments.
only 1 recommendation made.

If any of you readers are wondering why the authors on this site don't post as much as you'd like them to, LOOK IN THE MIRROR.

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#3 2009-03-17 00:31:48

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

I would have sworn someone commented on this, but I guess that was in chat.  See what you get for appearing there?  I am one of those 112 people... Tsk.  Bad me.


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#4 2009-03-21 13:03:38

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

very nice. sensual and discreet. I would like to read more on your thoughts and background of this religion.

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#5 2009-03-21 17:07:20

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Glad you enjoyed the story, Terminaxe.  I think if I started another story at this point, though, somebody would lynch me.  3dsmile

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#6 2009-04-06 23:30:27

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Good story and interesting concept.  Can't wait to read more!

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#7 2009-04-07 03:13:28

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

More?  Of this tripe?  Granted, I want to join this religion, but... really.

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#8 2009-04-11 04:31:10

SteelRage
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

as a short story it was "Definitely worth my time," but as the beginning of more, even a series of shorts, then it is a definite "Must Read!" 3dtongue

(posted from Chapter 1)


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....wow, this is the best I can come up with

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#9 2009-04-11 05:17:21

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Okay, enough guys....  where the hell would you take this story?  I honestly have no idea where this would go.  If you want it to have any hope of ever having a continuance, you're going to have to tell me what you see in it.  I wrote it to fit the quote.  The characters have no history, and not much in the way of future...  So...

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#10 2009-07-02 02:11:40

mjsinjapan
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Mmmmm. Quite a fun story, great short, thanks for writing.

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#11 2018-08-28 14:35:27

Old Salt
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Enjoyed reading this story.  Only thing throwing it off, is how, this 16 yr old obtained his skills in pleasuring females, yet was presented as a young male unsure of what was being required of him from the beginning.

(posted from Chapter 1)

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#12 2018-08-28 17:39:38

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Glad you enjoyed the story.  As to your issue, two things:

1. Natural talent - some people are just naturally good at sex.
2. Did you REALLY want to read a story about some virgin fumbling about with a whole bunch of girls?

[EDIT:] After I went back to refresh my memory concerning this story (it's been a while since I read it last), I can add this comment to my list above:  I never intimated that the guy in question was a virgin, or even close to it.  I merely made it clear he had no understanding of the ceremony he was participating in... and that he wasn't used to looking at naked girls right in front of him.  He could have achieved the demonstrated skill by simply having one long-term girlfriend previously... along with a bit of talent in this area, as previously mentioned.

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#13 2018-08-29 00:22:32

neolyn
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Eric Storm wrote:

2. Did you REALLY want to read a story about some virgin fumbling about with a whole bunch of girls?


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That could be an interesting story. A young virgin learning bit by bit how to be good at sex or at relationships, learning from trials and errors.

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#14 2018-08-29 02:15:03

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Perhaps, but NOT for a short story.

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#15 2018-08-29 18:18:53

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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

That would be very very bad indeed for a short story.

Last edited by neolyn (2018-08-29 18:19:20)

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#16 2018-08-31 14:48:27

HendrixMorton
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

A great short story....and an interesting religion indeed...

As a follow up, wonder what it would be like from the male initiation....

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#17 2018-09-01 00:02:27

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

There's a sequel I might consider writing...

3dsmile

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#18 2018-09-09 03:36:17

islandman79#
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Eric when’s next release ?

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#19 2018-09-09 08:19:29

Eric Storm
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Re: Pfynnic Fox, The

Um... this is a short story.  It doesn't HAVE a "next release".

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