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#1 2018-09-19 03:24:51

Bridget
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Cabal

Cabal

Mark Cabal is on a mission to save his eleven-year-old daughter Heather's life,  having exhausted all normal means at his disposal, desperate he turns to a mysterious stranger for aid, but what will it cost him?

This story will contain elements of Magic, MC, Inc, MF, Mf, Mg, and various combinations.


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#2 2018-09-19 03:39:28

James Marcus
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Re: Cabal

Great start.

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#3 2018-09-25 17:34:54

saurav_mystery1989
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Re: Cabal

Did we miss just the Chapter 3 or it is just a typo ??

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#4 2018-09-26 01:09:16

James Marcus
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Re: Cabal

No he wrote Chapter 4 intending it to be Chapter 3, then decided to write something in between turning Chapter 3 into 4. He is working on the new Chapter 3.

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#5 2018-09-26 01:31:22

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

James is correct, Chapter four was originally going to be Chapter three but I had an inspiration while I was editing it.  so I have decided to place a Penelope focused chapter between 2 and 4.   I hope you are enjoying the story.

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#6 2018-09-26 17:11:25

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Special Thanks to the person for the anonymous tip to change "Mondu" would be written "Mon Dieu".

I have corrected this in Chapter 4

will post chapter 3 soon, it's about 50% complete now.

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#7 2018-09-26 20:44:13

saurav_mystery1989
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Re: Cabal

Waiting for more and yes enjoying story so far.

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#8 2018-10-01 07:39:17

Darkside_6
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Re: Cabal

Loving the story and the premise.  Keep it up - can't wait for more!

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#9 2018-10-04 01:48:53

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Finished what I think will be the final draft of Chapter 5 tonight.  going to sleep on it, give it a final editorial pass then post tomorrow.

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#10 2018-10-04 12:47:01

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Sorry readers,

I have decided to postpone the posting of Cabal Chapter five.   
I am new to writing and still refining my editorial process.  Last night I received some valuable advice and I am going to incorporate it into my workflow. 

CH 5 is written, 
CH6 is 60-70%   

I will post Ch 5 "Easy Rider" as soon as I complete my new Editorial process, this is in an effort to tighten up my writing and deliver more value to you dear reader.

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#11 2018-10-07 03:44:21

Darkside_6
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Re: Cabal

Keep at it ... you have talent!

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#12 2018-10-10 03:31:40

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

just finished the first draft of Chapter 6, it's darker, way darker than Chapter 3, but really sets us up for the conclusion of Act 1,  Will probably post sometime next week after I have had some time to fine tune it a bit.

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#13 2018-10-28 02:17:10

DoomCock
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Re: Cabal

Whatever the "Buy Me a Coffee" link is meant to be, it's broken.  On every chapter.  I'd say check the address and retype it here.

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#14 2018-10-28 08:06:26

Eric Storm
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Re: Cabal

DoomCock wrote:

Whatever the "Buy Me a Coffee" link is meant to be, it's broken.  On every chapter.  I'd say check the address and retype it here.

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I've said it before, and I'll say it again, do not bring technical issues to the attention of the authors: bring them to the attention of the administration, through the contact form on the main site, or by emailing me directly.  Especially with something like this, it is likely that the author will not have the technical knowledge to know how to fix the problem.

In this case, I diagnosed the problem.  The author has used a relative URL instead of an absolute URL in his link, and that won't work.  What he included was:

Code:

<a href="buymeacoff.ee/NvnXxh10l">Buy Me a Coffee</a>

Note the missing "http://www." part.  The server will "recognize" this as a local file, not as a website (because "buymeacoff.ee/NvnXxh10l" is a perfectly legitimate Linux directory and filename...)  What he meant to use was the following:

Code:

<a href="http://www.buymeacoff.ee/NvnXxh10l">Buy Me a Coffee</a>

This tells the server to look out on the rest of the internet for what's being asked for.  In any case, here's the link you need: Buy Him a Coffee

Eric Storm


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#15 2018-10-30 18:25:26

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Thanks DC and Eric, 

sorry, my mistake. and the funny thing is .... I do have the technical know-how, I just totaly missed that LOL.

I hope you are all enjoying the story so far.   I have been struggling with the next chapter "Surrogate Serum" for a week or two now.  I should have it out soon as soon as I managed to tame a few personal demons.

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#16 2018-10-30 19:41:59

Eric Storm
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Re: Cabal

No worries, we all goof up from time to time.  My technical explanation wasn't so much for your benefit (though if you'd needed it, there it was...), it was to show others how complicated web-page coding can be, so that they'll understand why I tell them not to bother the authors with this stuff.

But since you know how, get off your butt and fix it!  LMAO  3dbig_smile  just kidding.

Eric Storm


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#17 2018-12-07 15:07:40

thehilz
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Re: Cabal

Read what you have posted so far and  thoroughly enjoyed it. Hope to see an update soon.

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#18 2019-09-03 22:25:36

Ser_Orc
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Re: Cabal

Nooooooo I need more. What a cliff hanger

(posted from Surrogate Serum)

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#19 2019-12-31 18:45:27

Billybob1969
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Re: Cabal

Enjoyed the story gripping from the 1st chapter. I hope you return to it one day

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#20 2020-04-22 02:32:54

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Billybob1969 wrote:

Enjoyed the story gripping from the 1st chapter. I hope you return to it one day

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Thank you,  I have began writing again.    just posted the next chapter in Bliss ( same universe different story )
I will be finishing the next chapter of Cabal next.

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#21 2020-04-22 02:34:28

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

Ser_Orc wrote:

Nooooooo I need more. What a cliff hanger

(posted from Surrogate Serum)

and you got the cliffhanger twice LOL.  Penny's last chapter can Cabal's last chapter sort of ended the same way.

YES I am writing again.  as posted a moment ago.  next chapter of Cabal is coming soon

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#22 2020-05-07 17:25:40

edjueinnest
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Re: Cabal

good story hope to read more from this writer soon

(posted from Surrogate Serum)

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#23 2020-05-12 02:28:01

abaddon.pale
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Re: Cabal

edjueinnest wrote:

good story hope to read more from this writer soon

(posted from Surrogate Serum)

Thank you, thank you, thank you..

:-)  I live for the feedback.

i'm currently writing the next Chapter of Cabal.   Papa's love should come out from under Permium status soon.

if there is anything in particular you like about the story let me know. so I can focus more on it 3dbig_smile/

have a great day.

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#24 2021-05-11 15:11:22

Flyingmark
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Re: Cabal

Will it be finished?

(posted from Pappas Love)

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#25 2023-01-25 18:14:24

Dadrepus
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Re: Cabal

Wow, this was really well done. Nothing offended me, story was intriguing, well thought out. Can't wait for the next chapter. How soon?

(posted from Pappas Love)


Always willing to help. May not be good at it ;-)

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