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#51 2022-07-01 15:45:22

sermona
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Registered: 2019-02-18
Posts: 34

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Yes you are not a proffessional writer ... you don't get money for writing.
I learnd some time: Hiring a proffesional is no garantee for good work or results.

In my opinion you are better than many proffesional writers.
I think one reason for their "better" spelling is: A proffesional can hire somone to proofread (and even that is no garantee for flawless spelling)

Please continue this great story.

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#52 2022-07-13 05:05:17

Glockman22
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

I love this story more and more with every chapter I feel like I'm on the island with them.

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#53 2022-07-25 02:08:04

Zmaybe
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From: Phoenix AZ
Registered: 2021-06-27
Posts: 64

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Chapter 35 was fun.  Am looking forward to the further adventure of Dan and Sue...and friends...

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#54 2022-08-28 11:13:17

Baldilocks76
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Registered: 2022-06-25
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

I have to say I'm very impressed with this story so far. Already being 38 chapters in, it feels like you have just scratched the surface of where this story could lead. I do hope the words continue to flow, and the chapters continue to excite and entertain. Thank you for what you've gifted us with to this point.

(posted from Chapter 38 (Bad news, and possible solutions))

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#55 2022-09-01 19:53:03

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Just a quick note to say THANK YOU to all of my readers and a double Thank You for the many nice comments you have given me.  I will continue this story however I may start a book two since this is so much longer than I ever envisioned it would be.  Stay tuned for the continued story of Dan, Sue, and their friends.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#56 2022-09-07 11:57:59

Zmaybe
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Thank you for writing this wonderful tale.  I like the direction you are heading and whether it is a continuation of this story or a conclusion and a new story as they move to a different venue is good for me either way.
I do see your point of Dan wanting to put in his 20, as I am retired military as well, but I feel he would feel guilty holding that position when he doesn't need the retirement pay.  There are only so many actual slots in the military for each rank, and him holding a Master Chief slot would prevent someone else having the chance for that. Plus, if he were to separate, he could commit full time to his vision of a world class security force that he and Jeff envisioned for the future.  Just a thought.

(posted from Chapter 40 (Grand opening and return to Dam Neck))

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#57 2022-09-10 18:23:55

Snake_eater1960
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

@Zmaybe,  First let me say Thank you for your continued support of this story.
I understand what you are saying about letting someone else have a shot at a higher rank however staying in to fulfill his 20 year commitment goes more to his character than gaining a pension.  At least that was the direction I was trying to convey with all of this.
I am leaning heavily to starting a book two so please stay tuned for more adventures from Dan, Sue and friends.
Thank you once again for taking the time to read this tale.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#58 2022-09-10 19:00:27

daves.not.here
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From: South Florida
Registered: 2007-06-15
Posts: 36

Re: Saving Sister Sue

This is a great story so far!  I'm really enjoying reading it.  I will probably go back and re-read it from the beginning again.  I started reading after chapter 31 was posted, so now it's been a while since I read the earlier parts.

Going forward, I wouldn't mind if you summarised the day-to-day minutiae, except where it's part of the plot, of course.

I hope you continue this story.
Thanks,
Dave

(posted from Chapter 40 (Grand opening and return to Dam Neck))

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#59 2022-09-13 22:51:20

Mikenc67
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From: North Carolina, USA
Registered: 2022-05-26
Posts: 54

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Enjoyed the story, especially the action scenes. The repetitive daily minute can be reduced though. Looking forward to book two.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#60 2023-01-15 21:53:37

Dadrepus
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Registered: 2023-01-11
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

This is a complete story, not just sex and it is very well though out (chapter 1).

(posted from Chapter 1 (Tragedy and extasy) )


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#61 2023-01-21 16:38:36

Dadrepus
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

You are a pretty great story teller and the little euphemisms crack me up like: "like a starving man at a Las Vegas buffet''. Very entertaining. Now if could just get the grammar right, it would just be so much better.

(posted from Chapter 36 (Leaving Paradise))


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#62 2023-01-21 21:14:46

Eric Storm
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Dadrepus wrote:

You are a pretty great story teller and the little euphemisms crack me up like: "like a starving man at a Las Vegas buffet''. Very entertaining.

This is a simile, not a euphemism.

Now if could just get the grammar right, it would just be so much better.

Did you honestly expect me to NOT mock you for complaining about someone else's grammar, while screwing up your own?

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#63 2023-05-23 13:56:22

Maverick7508
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Restarting after not reading this for a while. Gotta admit, with the cocktail student not being able to control his center of gravity I am surprised that he made it that far. He would have been better off in a different art, though finding one that didn't champion humility or inaction would have been difficult. I got a chuckle out of the collarbone break, since even with toughened bones(which a modern Japanese Jiu Jitsu practitioner would have no reason to have) the impact force to break the collarbone is much higher than that of the scaphoid in her hand.

(posted from Chapter 13 (Company picnic & introductions))

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#64 2023-05-23 14:26:06

Maverick7508
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Pardon me, I had the wrong bone in my previous comment. It was the Metacarpal, not the scaphoid. Though metacarpal fractures don't take much force either, rather they take less.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#65 2023-05-23 14:28:39

Maverick7508
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Re: Saving Sister Sue

Still though, I am enjoying the story overall, can't wait to see what waits for me in the rest of this story and into the sequel.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

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#66 2024-01-18 17:45:44

CalifRef
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Registered: 2023-08-19
Posts: 5

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Great beginning to a wonderful, long, story that continues in a 2nd book, and for many chapters.

(posted from Chapter 2 (New life, new wife))

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#67 2024-03-19 16:51:40

CalifRef
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Registered: 2023-08-19
Posts: 5

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Still loving this... yes, there are typos, long run-on sentences, confusing descriptions, and missing words, but it's a good, interesting read. I'm enjoying it very much.

(posted from Chapter 27 (Final wedding prep))

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#68 2024-03-20 22:24:54

CalifRef
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Registered: 2023-08-19
Posts: 5

Re: Saving Sister Sue

Very well done! Tasteful but exciting. Keep it cumming.

(posted from Chapter 28 (Bachelor party & a Wedding))

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