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2022-Sep-16 @ 9:29 PM | |
Bridget Barmaid Member since 2006-Sep-9 Posts: 769 |
This Ain't My First Rodeo ----- Please read The Mystic Wolf Pub Critiquing Guide. SITE CONTENT POLICY: The administrator of this site will not reject, remove, or censor any story posted to this site based on the story's content. No story shall be removed except for purely technical reasons (which will be worked out with the author so that the story can be reposted as quickly as possible), or due to a direct order from the site's hosting provider, a law-enforcement entity, or the story's owner. |
2022-Sep-16 @ 9:50 PM | |
Zmaybe Inebriated Member since 2021-Jun-27 Posts: 64 |
Nice start... ----- |
2022-Sep-16 @ 10:43 PM | |
Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5745 |
You can remove the word "(revised)" from the title of this story. Since you chose to post a new story, rather than to repost the fixed version to the original story, I have deleted that original. ----- Please Remember: The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone." The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended. If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM. ---- Facebook page |
2022-Sep-16 @ 10:47 PM | |
Skyscraper Contributor Member since 2022-Sep-14 Posts: 18 |
Thank you. This is appreciated. ----- You're either born with common sense or you're not. I was not. |
2023-Sep-3 @ 10:59 AM | |
Elessar Completely Blotto Member since 2009-Oct-28 Posts: 396 |
I honestly couldn't finish this story. Maybe I am used to Eric's writing style for detail, but this story lacked a lot of that. ----- |
2023-Sep-4 @ 12:13 AM | |
Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5745 |
Someone needs to go read the Critiquing Guide... ----- Please Remember: The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone." The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended. If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM. ---- Facebook page |
2023-Sep-4 @ 1:16 AM | |
Elessar Completely Blotto Member since 2009-Oct-28 Posts: 396 |
Yes I do. It has been a very long time since I tried to critiqued anybody so I don't remember the process. I will go back over it and hopefully come back with a better way of critiquing.
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2023-Sep-4 @ 4:40 PM | |
Skyscraper Contributor Member since 2022-Sep-14 Posts: 18 |
Yeah. I don't know. I do really appreciate this feedback. And he's not wrong. It was kinda rushed. Maybe I could go back and add details, but that would be a while if I did. ----- You're either born with common sense or you're not. I was not. |
2023-Sep-5 @ 2:43 AM | |
Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5745 |
I understand, and I was slightly hesitant to call him out, because he did at least tell you how to fix what he didn't like. But the policies are in place to protect ALL authors, some of whom are very insecure in their skills, and who would have found Elessar's comments completely disheartening. It's not that there was anything necessarily wrong with what he said, it was how he said it. ----- Please Remember: The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone." The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended. If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM. ---- Facebook page |
2023-Sep-5 @ 7:24 PM | |
Skyscraper Contributor Member since 2022-Sep-14 Posts: 18 |
But you're also one of the greatest authors I've ever read. Sometimes I think it's better to leave the images up to the reader's imagination. ----- You're either born with common sense or you're not. I was not. |
2023-Sep-6 @ 3:13 AM | |
Eric Storm Pub Owner Member since 2006-Sep-13 Posts: 5745 |
It can be, at times. If you want to let the reader feel sort of "in charge" of certain details... like if you really want them to be able to visualize the MC's girlfriend however they would want her... or if you want them to picture their own favorite color on the MC's car, or what-have-you. But, to be fair to his criticism, this should be a conscious choice on our parts, not just something we do because we're overlooking it. ----- Please Remember: The right to Freedom of Speech does not carry the proviso, "As long as it doesn't upset anyone." The US Constitution does not grant you the right to not be offended. If you don't like what someone's saying... IGNORE THEM. ---- Facebook page |