The Pfynnic Fox

Where do I go to join this religion?

Entry for PubTales Challenge #1.

Hmmm.

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Eric Storm

I would have sworn someone commented on this, but I guess that was in chat.  See what you get for appearing there?  I am one of those 112 people... Tsk.  Bad me.

very nice. sensual and discreet. I would like to read more on your thoughts and background of this religion.

(posted from Chapter 1)

Glad you enjoyed the story, Terminaxe.  I think if I started another story at this point, though, somebody would lynch me. 

Eric

Good story and interesting concept.  Can't wait to read more!

(posted from Chapter 1)

More?  Of this tripe?  Granted, I want to join this religion, but... really.

Eric

as a short story it was "Definitely worth my time," but as the beginning of more, even a series of shorts, then it is a definite "Must Read!"

(posted from Chapter 1)

Okay, enough guys....  where the hell would you take this story?  I honestly have no idea where this would go.  If you want it to have any hope of ever having a continuance, you're going to have to tell me what you see in it.  I wrote it to fit the quote.  The characters have no history, and not much in the way of future...  So...

Eric

Mmmmm. Quite a fun story, great short, thanks for writing.

(posted from Chapter 1)

Enjoyed reading this story.  Only thing throwing it off, is how, this 16 yr old obtained his skills in pleasuring females, yet was presented as a young male unsure of what was being required of him from the beginning.

(posted from Chapter 1)

Glad you enjoyed the story.  As to your issue, two things:

1. Natural talent - some people are just naturally good at sex.
2. Did you REALLY want to read a story about some virgin fumbling about with a whole bunch of girls?

[EDIT:] After I went back to refresh my memory concerning this story (it's been a while since I read it last), I can add this comment to my list above:  I never intimated that the guy in question was a virgin, or even close to it.  I merely made it clear he had no understanding of the ceremony he was participating in... and that he wasn't used to looking at naked girls right in front of him.  He could have achieved the demonstrated skill by simply having one long-term girlfriend previously... along with a bit of talent in this area, as previously mentioned.

Eric Storm

Eric Storm wrote:

2. Did you REALLY want to read a story about some virgin fumbling about with a whole bunch of girls?


Eric Storm

That could be an interesting story. A young virgin learning bit by bit how to be good at sex or at relationships, learning from trials and errors.

Perhaps, but NOT for a short story.

Eric Storm

That would be very very bad indeed for a short story.

A great short story....and an interesting religion indeed...

As a follow up, wonder what it would be like from the male initiation....

There's a sequel I might consider writing...



Eric Storm

Eric when’s next release ?

Um... this is a short story.  It doesn't HAVE a "next release".

Eric Storm