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2024-Dec-7 @ 8:43 AM
Bridget
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2024-Dec-8 @ 7:18 AM
JustLucky
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Member since 2021-Oct-11
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Quite an engaging story in many ways, Relatable and id suggest mirrors true events for many of the readers.
I've known a few tomboys and they were always awesome friends without much of the bullshit their contemporaries seem to slather on life.....
Great read although now im wanting more story lol


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2024-Dec-8 @ 11:11 AM
SLT
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Thanks for reading my story Justlucky, and thank you even more for providing feedback! to a new writer like me it is like gold. I'm really glad that it felt relatable to you, I was hoping to evoke some of those memories of hungry, sweaty little moments that many of us have had at one point or another. Now that I know that someone liked it, I'll definitely think about ways of continuing it, I certainly liked writing it. Anyway thanks again!


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2024-Dec-9 @ 7:02 PM
JustLucky
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SLT wrote:

Thanks for reading my story Justlucky, and thank you even more for providing feedback! to a new writer like me it is like gold. I'm really glad that it felt relatable to you, I was hoping to evoke some of those memories of hungry, sweaty little moments that many of us have had at one point or another. Now that I know that someone liked it, I'll definitely think about ways of continuing it, I certainly liked writing it. Anyway thanks again!

SLT it evoked emotions in me long forgotten and brought back memories of someone I knew too well way back when treehouses and forts were a normal part of a kids life.
I knew a Marla and she became a semi permanent fixture in our house as a kid in the late 70's until she "Moved away" yet our paths crossed many times over the following years without either of us being aware until we finally spent a weekend catching up after I finally went to a School Reunion.
I appreciate the second chapter so soon too.
Love your work :-)


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2024-Dec-10 @ 3:04 AM
SLT
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Posts: 21

JustLucky wrote:

SLT it evoked emotions in me long forgotten and brought back memories of someone I knew too well way back when treehouses and forts were a normal part of a kids life.
I knew a Marla and she became a semi permanent fixture in our house as a kid in the late 70's until she "Moved away" yet our paths crossed many times over the following years without either of us being aware until we finally spent a weekend catching up after I finally went to a School Reunion.
I appreciate the second chapter so soon too.
Love your work :-)

Wow, that is exactly what I was hoping for. Moreover, your post has given me even more fuel for the kinds of places I might be able to take the story in the future, so thanks for that. just imagining 'catching up' with Marla in the story some time down the line is really fun and dramatic to think about. Writing it has been a bit of a time machine for me, so i'm pleased as punch that it made you feel something and took you back to some fond memories too. Anyway thanks so much for the feedback!


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2024-Dec-10 @ 12:15 PM
JustLucky
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Member since 2021-Oct-11
Posts: 49

SLT wrote:

JustLucky wrote:

SLT it evoked emotions in me long forgotten and brought back memories of someone I knew too well way back when treehouses and forts were a normal part of a kids life.
I knew a Marla and she became a semi permanent fixture in our house as a kid in the late 70's until she "Moved away" yet our paths crossed many times over the following years without either of us being aware until we finally spent a weekend catching up after I finally went to a School Reunion.
I appreciate the second chapter so soon too.
Love your work :-)

Wow, that is exactly what I was hoping for. Moreover, your post has given me even more fuel for the kinds of places I might be able to take the story in the future, so thanks for that. just imagining 'catching up' with Marla in the story some time down the line is really fun and dramatic to think about. Writing it has been a bit of a time machine for me, so i'm pleased as punch that it made you feel something and took you back to some fond memories too. Anyway thanks so much for the feedback!

Most welcome SLT, always happy to spitball with the added bonus of more chapters :-)


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I am a new Author, and it would be fair to say that I do not yet have a well defined style or POV. What I can say is that I'm fascinated with early and formative experiences. I hope that you enjoy what I write as I develop.