Bad Babette! Trabajo!

Jack rescues and adopts a pregnant young housekeeper, and helps raise her troublesome daughter.

Includes underage sex, smoking, and descriptions of past abuse. Some tags / codes are in later chapters.

Pretty damned good, would make a nice series!

(posted from the Item Information Page)

I'm glad you like the story. Thanks so much for commenting!

Pretty good story.. Maybe one of your best so far.  I like how sassy Babette is. 

Constructive feedback… and this is just a suggestion, your story your rules.

#1 It seems Rosa is fairly open minded ( but not overly so ) about Jack’s interactions with Babbet. Maybe she should suggest he spank her in some of the early interactions. 

#2 Rosa and Jack are “friends” maybe a bit more of their relationship could be explored. Other than the benefits and she works for him.
#3 I’m not sure Jack ever mentions what he does for a living. And there is a general lack of color in his life other than Rosa and Babbet… a few paragraphs here and there in each chapter about life in general… just to add color would be nice.
#4 The sex and naughty scenes could be longer with more detail. There is a LOT of potential hotness in this story that is..ehm… left untapped.


All in All it was and is a very enjoyable read.  I am not a PRM member ( though I am a PRM content contributor ) so I look forward to reading the last chapter once it becomes available.

(posted from Chapter 5)

Thanks for reading, Abaddon, and for the suggested improvements.

I mostly agree, the story could be much better if I spent another week or two working on it.

Unfortunately, I have very limited time and ideas for 73 zillion other stories. LOL