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The Academic and the Nymphomaniac
An erotic SciFy comedy
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Just a thought, but you might also want to write an actual story description... I haven't the faintest idea what your story is about.
Eric Storm
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I like the premise so far Drgonzo1. However the story reads very mechanically to me. That would be my only mild critique. I have read a great many stories that are written that way so it's not a flaw at all. But just thought I'd point it out. I don't know what to suggest to make it seem lest mechanical but if a thought crosses my mind that could help and you want to hear it I will let you know. But again I like what you have put up so far. I look forward to the next chapter.
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Due to some posting difficulties, I'm locking this thread in favor of the new one.
Eric Storm
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