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#1 2023-08-31 16:26:01
Fantasy Story
Fantasy Story
Snori Hurlesson is a wizard, who, after receiving a letter, starts on a months-long journey to reclaim a lost treasure. With the help of 6 dwarves and a bandit, this is sure to be a story you can't put down.
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#2 2023-08-31 17:01:41
- Skyscraper
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Re: Fantasy Story
Sorry for the horrible font choice. I was going for something old english-y. Might not have been the best choice. 
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#3 2023-09-01 03:30:16
- Zmaybe
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What a terrible format. Too hard to read. Gave me a head ache just trying to read the first paragraph. It may be a good story, but as it is right now I will not be reading it. A good writer uses a font that works for the majority of possible readers, This author decided not to . Good luck.
(posted from Chapter 1)
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#4 2023-09-01 13:45:51
- Skyscraper
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Yeah. I realized that. Was trying something new. I reverted back to Times New Roman. Sorry for the headache.
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#5 2023-09-02 01:27:48
- Elessar
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Re: Fantasy Story
I’m very curious to where this is going. So far seems very familiar but that could be the fantasy aspect of it.
Only complaints I can see are abrupt transitions between time periods, the random narrative aspect that seems to be going as if this was written from a 3rd person overseeing everything after the fact.
Story line itself is okay otherwise and I look forward to reading more.
(posted from Introductions)
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#6 2023-09-02 04:57:07
- Eric Storm
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Re: Fantasy Story
Zmaybe wrote:
A good writer uses a font that works for the majority of possible readers, ...
I'd just like to point out that a "good writer", that is a professional writer...
Doesn't choose fonts. That's the job of the typesetter, a process that is completely out of the hands of the author, and an entirely different skill set. There is absolutely no reason to expect an author - good, bad, or indifferent - to know anything about typesetting.
Of course, if the web designer would get off his ass and finish version 2.0 of this site, this wouldn't have been an issue, because ver. 2.0 has enforced typesetting (that is, the style of the text in stories is mandated by the site, not the author.) But that hasn't happened yet, and Guardians know if it ever will.
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#7 2023-09-02 14:40:25
- Skyscraper
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Re: Fantasy Story
Elessar wrote:
Only complaints I can see are abrupt transitions between time periods, the random narrative aspect that seems to be going as if this was written from a 3rd person overseeing everything after the fact.
(posted from Introductions)
Transitions between time periods... I wanted to make sure I had my bases covered with something aside from the stereotypical "--" to delineate a change in time. The perspective is something I hope to make clearer as the story goes on (key word being hope).
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