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Crusader · 2017-01-31 17:20:49

I have no idea what the 'surprise' ending is going to be, but I've liked the story so far.

(posted from Chapter 7 My Soul)

Crusader · 2017-01-31 17:35:35

and i guess i should have looked at the post date of the story. oh well.

Eric Storm · 2017-01-31 21:09:00

LOL

The "Prospective Authors" section is now closed. The stories were left there to encourage those who had posted there to keep writing.

Eric Storm

Crusader · 2017-02-01 15:59:09

I didn't even realize that I was in the Prospective Authors section. did a search on MC. now i know what the [] brackets mean.

Eric Storm · 2017-02-01 19:16:40

Yes, it was how we included the author's name in those stories.

Unfortunately, I don't think Fledgling is still around.

howard · 2017-03-15 19:55:20

It took me a little while to appreciate the story but quickly concluded that 'city' means 'body' and 'home' means 'cell'. The latest chapter practically confirms the thought.
I presume the attraction is the beginning of telepathy.
A good story that makes you think rather than just float along.
Its a shame its been abandoned.

(posted from the Item Information Page)

Fred73 · 2021-08-25 16:23:52

It is a shame people have to leave negative comments on everything the read or see. People are mean at heart and donâ€™t want anyone to be mean to them. So donâ€™t pay attention to the negative comments. Read them and take it with a grain of salt.
You are a talented writer, the story line here is great. I am looking forward to the ending.

(posted from Chapter 6 Master the Tempest is Raging)

Dadrepus · 2024-01-01 17:32:14

Another good story abandoned without completion.

(posted from Chapter 7 My Soul)

Sam Spayed · 2024-09-05 17:16:20

There's a great story in here. The writing is fairly solid, not a professional quality but toward the top end of fan fiction. There's masses of vision.

This is a very complex plot. My feeling is that too much of it is on display. The blue text at the start of each chapter can stay but if all of the other mystical stuff was removed, the story would hang together better. It's the man and the girl I care about, not abstract notions of sentient nano machines controlling people, not yet. I may one day care, when it become relevant to the plot, but it currently isn't. We need George to get the poor girl out of jail first. We can worry about why people do what they do later. Foreshadowing is great but explanations are telling, not showing.
I'm certainly disappointed to get to the end and find there's no more to read. I was enjoying it. While there are certainly faults, no story is perfect and this one is original, thought provoking and immersive.

(posted from Chapter 7 My Soul)

Last edited by Sam Spayed (2024-09-05 17:23:07)

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