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#1 2025-01-28 09:29:30

Bridget
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Registered: 2006-09-09
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Daddy's Home

Daddy's Home

NOTE: This is my first time writing.  All constructive criticism is welcome.

A young woman, looking forward to her father returning home, fondly reminisces about her sexualised childhood at the hands of her father, who has been in prison for those misdeeds towards her, as he is about to be released at the end of his sentence.


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#2 2025-01-30 09:14:54

JustLucky
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Registered: 2021-10-11
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Re: Daddy's Home

Read it a few days ago and skimmed it again just now, The premise is interesting as it the viewpoint.
Its a good short read but it has way more potential if say you broke it down into a serial covering the original timeline allowing a deeper dive into the characters involved.
I enjoyed it

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#3 2025-01-30 12:18:15

TransSister
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Registered: 2023-08-04
Posts: 9

Re: Daddy's Home

JustLucky wrote:

Read it a few days ago and skimmed it again just now, The premise is interesting as it the viewpoint.
Its a good short read but it has way more potential if say you broke it down into a serial covering the original timeline allowing a deeper dive into the characters involved.
I enjoyed it

For my first story, I didn't want to attempt something huge.
It'll take me a bit of time to flesh it all out, I reckon, into something more than a short story.  If a few more say they want a longer version, I'll definitely give it a go.

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#4 2025-07-12 16:47:54

hst666
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Registered: 2021-05-23
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Re: Daddy's Home

I definitely want a longer version. It's good, but would be much better fleshed out.

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#5 2025-07-13 06:55:05

TransSister
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Registered: 2023-08-04
Posts: 9

Re: Daddy's Home

hst666 wrote:

I definitely want a longer version. It's good, but would be much better fleshed out.

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You are in luck.  After reading JustLucky's desire for a full story version of this, the idea has been percolating around in my brain (when it wasn't busy with my university studies or D&D-stuff).  I've made a start on it, but it'll be a while before I'm ready to post any of it.

I'm only a couple of semesters away from finishing my degree so that's taking a LOT of my time & brain-power, but I hope to find time to get this and another story written up well enough to publish the first chapter(s) of them here before Christmas.

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