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#1 2025-02-08 00:25:55
Bad Babette! Trabajo!
Bad Babette! Trabajo!
Jack rescues and adopts a pregnant young housekeeper, and helps raise her troublesome daughter.
Includes underage sex, smoking, and descriptions of past abuse. Some tags / codes are in later chapters.
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#2 2025-02-08 05:34:18
- JustLucky
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Re: Bad Babette! Trabajo!
Pretty damned good, would make a nice series!
(posted from the Item Information Page)
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#3 2025-02-08 05:58:48
- CreepyUnclePete
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Re: Bad Babette! Trabajo!
I'm glad you like the story. Thanks so much for commenting!
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#4 2025-02-08 14:41:15
- abaddon.pale
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Re: Bad Babette! Trabajo!
Pretty good story.. Maybe one of your best so far. I like how sassy Babette is.
Constructive feedback… and this is just a suggestion, your story your rules.
#1 It seems Rosa is fairly open minded ( but not overly so ) about Jack’s interactions with Babbet. Maybe she should suggest he spank her in some of the early interactions.
#2 Rosa and Jack are “friends†maybe a bit more of their relationship could be explored. Other than the benefits and she works for him.
#3 I’m not sure Jack ever mentions what he does for a living. And there is a general lack of color in his life other than Rosa and Babbet… a few paragraphs here and there in each chapter about life in general… just to add color would be nice.
#4 The sex and naughty scenes could be longer with more detail. There is a LOT of potential hotness in this story that is..ehm… left untapped.
All in All it was and is a very enjoyable read. I am not a PRM member ( though I am a PRM content contributor ) so I look forward to reading the last chapter once it becomes available.
(posted from Chapter 5)
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#5 2025-02-08 14:54:39
- CreepyUnclePete
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Re: Bad Babette! Trabajo!
Thanks for reading, Abaddon, and for the suggested improvements.
I mostly agree, the story could be much better if I spent another week or two working on it.
Unfortunately, I have very limited time and ideas for 73 zillion other stories. LOL
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