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My Son's Girlfriend Has A Secret
The Price of Purity?
Ryan thinks he’s found the perfect girl—sweet, innocent, and devoted. But when his father, Bill, catches Anny in a secret transaction with a stranger, the illusion of innocence is shattered.
For Anny, a desperate family crisis has forced her into a world she isn't prepared for. For Bill, she is a puzzle to be broken and a prize to be claimed. In a whirlwind of power and surrender, an illicit arrangement is struck: Bill will save her family, but in exchange, he takes total ownership of her body.
Now, Anny must navigate a dangerous double life—playing the devoted girlfriend by day, while becoming a secret, submissive toy for the man who owns her every breath.
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This chapter has a few LLM tags left in, apparently accidentally.
(posted from Chapter 4)
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TwelveBaud wrote:
This chapter has a few LLM tags left in, apparently accidentally.
(posted from Chapter 4)
Thank you TwelveBaud..
I have fixed and marked the chapter revised. Thanks for the spot!.
I hope you are enjoying the story so far.
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I actually made myself a cup of tea before I sat to read this...all ready for a smoldering forbidden May December romance between a doting older man and a vivacious young woman. Then Ryan's dad pretty rapidly disabused me of that notion, but to be clear I was pretty instantly brought on board. I can't say I exactly admire the guy, but it is exciting to inhabit someone with those instincts for a spell.
My favorite part is the phone call scene with the son...that is such a cruel, hot scene, like the cruelty makes it hotter. What a bastard lol.
Great ideas, excellent work.
(posted from Chapter 1)
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Haha idk man, I'm with Anny I think he definitely hates his son. though I agree that If and when his Ryan finds out about the tangled psychosexual humiliation symphony his father composed for him, I suspect he will either become very much like is father or it will cripple him...Well actually, either way it will cripple him, but the constellation of neuroses and defense mechanisms he develops have a pretty broad range. I do wonder too if dad's dad Tywin Lannister him too like he's doing to Ryan...because hurt people hurt people and so forth.
Anyway, regarding the actual writing I'm a huge sucker for expressive dialogue tags and action beats. I also appreciate setting to see that Anny does have some opinions even if they are only the opinions she thinks she's supposed to have...only for now though I suspect. Also, hope we get to see what Steph's whole deal is, i'm curious.
(posted from Chapter 2)
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